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Jul. 31st, 2005 @ 12:05 am Part 10: Severus.
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From:ariadneelda
Date:July 30th, 2005 08:25 pm (UTC)
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Mmmm... Snape suffering at the sight of Harry, his thoughts, his reactions, it was all SO hot! Poor Severus, he is so much affected by Harry but he hides it really well, although not quite easily, it seems. ;) And I love it so much that even though this is 3rd person POV, it's still, clearly, Snape's voice, full of sarcasm and self-sarcasm. And his inner dialogue is just so perfect.

an alchemy of thought, fulfilling itself with a Midas-like touch, turning all that glittered into gold. Gryffindor gold...

Beautiful line – how you went from alchemy to Midas to gold to Gryffindor gold, and tied it all together.

And have I ever told you how much I love your use of italics? But agh, why did you have to stop there?