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Jul. 12th, 2005 @ 10:20 am Part 6: Severus.
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From:switchknife
Date:July 12th, 2005 06:18 am (UTC)

*loves back*

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SQUEE!

*coughs*

Um, yes. My god, I love your long reviews.

What amazed me in this review of yours was that you spotted something that I wasn't aware of (I can't speak for Atra)--that theme of heat and cold. I guess I picked it up from Atra naturally, because GAH, that last chapter--the sound of Potter's cool gasp was resounding like a gong in my head, and the heat of his skin put me into a veritable fever every time I tried to write this chapter. (Atra's EVIL EVIL EVIL to write with, you know--I mean, she's such a temptation, and her Harry just--makes me want to--do things--)

So I guess I followed through on that hot/cold/black theme without realising it, but NOW! Now you've pointed it out, and I'm like: 'SQUEE! Look how beautiful Atra and I are together!'

(Sorry, Atra. Tell me if I'm freaking you out. :D)

And. Er. Severus. Damned complicated man, as hard and sharp as a chisel, but vulnerable in all the right places, as you've said. (Okay. Some wrong places as well. Very wrong, if his reactions to his thirteen-year-old student are anything to go by.)

I'm delighted that you caught the Dark Mark line, little though it was--I wasn't sure anyone would really notice it, but it does mean a lot. How very much Severus longs to escape from his own darkness... to erase parts of his past, of himself. Not that Harry can see that, of course, with all the verbal bashing the poor boy's being subjected to. (Like I said somewhere before: snark = Snape's defense mechanism. And paranoia = his security system.)

It's very difficult, when writing Severus, to be sure that one isn't revealing too many of his vulnerabilities--I've found that it's better to leave most of them implied rather than explicitly stated, otherwise the verity of Snape's POV is violated.

I thought I mightn't have shown him at ALL, in the way I intended, but you've assured me that I have. :)

Thank you.
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From:atrata
Date:July 12th, 2005 06:25 am (UTC)

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(Sorry, Atra. Tell me if I'm freaking you out. :D)

Ha! Not at all. I keep saying we're in the same boats, don't I? *grin*

And... yeah. I don't think about things like themes, or about running threads through what I'm writing. It's all very intuitive for me; I just write. And then people point stuff out that I never thought of (like this!), and it's so very, very cool that I barely know what to do with myself.
From:switchknife
Date:July 12th, 2005 06:26 am (UTC)

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Well, I know what to do with you...
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From:atrata
Date:July 12th, 2005 06:34 am (UTC)
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Oh, yeah? Do tell.
From:switchknife
Date:July 12th, 2005 01:11 pm (UTC)
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You see, I happen to own this... costume... made of sinfully soft, skin-warm black leather--it reveals more than it conceals, but that is rather the point. You'd look lovely in it, I think, open as it is in all the right places; if you wouldn't mind waiting on your knees, with your thighs apart and your ankles bound, I do believe that I could find a great deal to do with you.
From:cravache
Date:July 12th, 2005 09:27 am (UTC)

*snogs*

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Well, you write Severus very well, as I said. There are not many people who are able to find a balance between what is best left implied and what can, or should be revealed. He is not eerie and brittle and as bitter as the piquancy of lemon upon one's tongue for nothing. So many people canon-rape Severus. No. Nononono!! Ick. But you have the balance scoped out very well and it works perfectly.

I like fics that leave me thinking. Sure, smut is great. But I love me a piece of reading that gets my noggin churning over what I have read, like Nights Nothings has so far. Nothing turns me on more aside from various things involving dominance, submission and a spiel of shibari rope than a well-shaped, well-orchestrated character. You are very much the tease with giving snippets of Severus like this, but you are muchly loved for it. :D :D

Some wrong places as well. Very wrong, if his reactions to his thirteen-year-old student are anything to go by. Aye. Naughty, naughty. But I noticed James was mentioned a bit in these two chapters, quite blatantly, with bitterness (from Severus' view, as always), and it makes me wonder... But I look too deeply into things. So, I am probably way off there.

SQUEE! Look how beautiful Atra and I are together! You both make beautiful love fic together. You are on each other's wavelength, consciously or nay. That is very evident. Rawr. You need a colourbar: Switch + Atra = OTP OMGTHEIRLOVEISSOCANON. Or one of those animation icons. Hee!

You must think I have verbal diarrhoea. *sheepish blush*

*snogs*
From:cravache
Date:July 12th, 2005 09:56 am (UTC)

Hee!

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*giggles*
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From:atrata
Date:July 12th, 2005 11:32 am (UTC)

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Yeah, because my love for Switch needs to be MORE stalkerish obvious. *grin*

And also. Um. Normally I don't self-pimp. But. Have you read In Between Days? The things you say make me think you'd like it, although it's entirely Harry's POV. It starts a bit slow (I think, anyway), but gets better. Severus is very... well, Severus. I think it's thinky. Er. Yes. *runs away, blushing*
From:cravache
Date:July 12th, 2005 12:16 pm (UTC)

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Oooh, lovely! I am always on the prowl for more interesting things to read.

Never be ashamed of self-pimpage!! *snogs Atra*

*clicks link!*
From:switchknife
Date:July 12th, 2005 01:02 pm (UTC)

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OH MY GOD YOU HAVEN'T READ IBD?!

YOU MUST. Cravache, it is my humble belief that Atra's written the best Snape in fandom with that story. The most inscrutable, the most complex--the first few chapters might take time to pick up the pace, but trust me, it's worth it. There's just no way you can predict the plot--not until it's too late, anyway--and you'll just gobble this story up like the gem it is.

And Atra's Harry is SO DELICIOUS OMG.

Just. Yes. IBD's part of a rec list that I'm supposed to be putting up soon, but I'm still trying to find the other broken links... Gah!
From:cravache
Date:July 12th, 2005 01:23 pm (UTC)

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Your squeeing is adorable. <3

I haven't read a lot of Snarry, tbh. *hides* A lot of it is... hrm. < insert unimpressed look here > Dig me?

BUT...

Snape's eyes went dead, and a shiver ran down Harry's spine. "Would you like a body count, Potter?" he said, and Harry shivered again. "Or are you asking what it feels like to kill another human being, to hold life in your hands and break it, to watch a person's eyes cloud over and there's that brief moment --" *quivers* Christ. How cold. Perfect. Just so terribly perfect. I am loving this very, very much. I see what you mean: Atra's Snape is very cold and calculating, and Potter is perfect. The interaction between the two is so well done. I just... Can't talk. Reading. ;)

Call me Toni, btw.

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From:atrata
Date:July 12th, 2005 02:12 pm (UTC)

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it is my humble belief that Atra's written the best Snape in fandom with that story.

Aw, see, now you're just trying to make me blush in all the places your ... costume ... left open. It's totally working. Hrmph.

I'd flail at you as per usual, but I'm waiting patiently on my knees, ankles bound, sucking on your fingers. Makes it difficult to flail.
From:yanks02
Date:July 12th, 2005 01:16 pm (UTC)

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Okay, I'm an idiot. I never associated the atrata of that story to be the same one here. <.<

I loved that story though.
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From:atrata
Date:July 12th, 2005 06:40 pm (UTC)

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Heh. Yup, same atrata. *grin* Glad to hear you liked IBD!
From:switchknife
Date:July 12th, 2005 01:03 pm (UTC)

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OMG! :D If there was ever an icon that spoke The Truth, this is it.

*hearts!*
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From:atrata
Date:July 13th, 2005 01:56 am (UTC)

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Also, you know, you started the heat/cold thing. In part two. Here:

he saw how Potter's mind had turned a little blank, a little hot.

Heat.

Severus flinched back immediately. The edges of his knife dug into his hand, suddenly too warm against his racing pulse...


So I probably took it from there, and you took it from THERE, and it's a whole big taking-it fest. Um.

Okay. Sodding off now. *grin*
From:switchknife
Date:July 14th, 2005 12:29 am (UTC)

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... taking-it fest.

*mind goes a little blank, and very hot*

Taking... it. Harry taking it... On Snape's desk...

*shakes head to dispel images*

You naughty, naughty Atra, you. Using words like that! Now all I can see this truly, horribly perverse image involving--uh--you know, those really long, slim glass vials? Almost as long as a man's forearm? And Harry's all bent over and trembling, because this is his punishment--cool glass and warm oil sliding into him--and Snape's telling him in cruel tones not to push too much, to relax and take it like a good boy, or Harry might get very, very hurt. (Of course, Snape doesn't tell him about the Unbreakable charm... It's so very good to see the boy terrified, panicking, sweat-moistened and gasping and hard.)

*brain-dead*

DAMN YOU. Argh. And damn all those times I handled laboratory test-tubes...
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From:atrata
Date:July 14th, 2005 12:39 am (UTC)

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Okay. This totally goes into the fic.

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From:atrata
Date:July 14th, 2005 12:43 am (UTC)

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Well, you know. Unless you don't want it to.

But OMG, you're killing me. Ngh.
From:switchknife
Date:July 14th, 2005 01:21 am (UTC)

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*laughs* I was just starting on writing some porn based on this (dedicated to you, of course), but I certainly don't mind adding it to the fic in the future! (Provided we can get Harry to do something silly enough to earn this punishment--perhaps Snape's trying to teach him to take better care of the... Potions instruments after Harry accidentally breaks a few. 'Obviously, Mr Potter, you haven't been taught the value of things. I'm going to ensure that you never treat my property carelessly. Ever. Again.')
From:switchknife
Date:July 14th, 2005 01:25 am (UTC)

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Or we could do more comment-porn. Uh.
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From:atrata
Date:July 14th, 2005 01:26 am (UTC)

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[insert my usual flailing here]

Well, if you want to write it on its own, far be it from me to stop you. My brain stopped functioning a while back.

But I can't imagine it will be difficult to get Harry to break shit. I think he's going to be pretty jumpy around Snape. And, ha. Snape could startle him on purpose so he drops things. And then, obviously, he'll need to be punished.

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From:cravache
Date:July 14th, 2005 01:30 am (UTC)

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...um...

cool glass and warm oil sliding into him--and Snape's telling him in cruel tones not to push too much

*whimpers* I, um... uh...

(Of course, Snape doesn't tell him about the Unbreakable charm... It's so very good to see the boy terrified, panicking, sweat-moistened and gasping and hard.)

...I am so fucking kinked right now. *sweats*

You have no idea how much that turns me on. That makes the submissive in me crave.
From:switchknife
Date:July 14th, 2005 01:41 am (UTC)

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*grins evilly*

What can I say--I like keeping my subs terrified entertained.
From:cravache
Date:July 14th, 2005 01:52 am (UTC)

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*grins weakly back*

I know you do. You do it so well.

If you were my Dominant...

*goes weak-kneed*

...you have no idea.