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Jul. 12th, 2005 @ 10:20 am Part 6: Severus.

'My office,' Severus said coolly, and nodded to the right.

Potter recovered himself quickly enough to obey, although his legs were somewhat unsteady when he began to walk. Severus repressed the urge to sneer; he wondered what James Potter would think of his son doing what he'd just done, bringing himself off against ugly, oily Snivellus Snape. The irony was almost overwhelming.

He followed the boy to his office, observing him all the way--marvelling at the thought that this was the devil he'd faced down earlier, now so cowed by simple lust and shame. Severus felt surprisingly pleasant, all of a sudden; it was as though Potter's surrender had calmed him, steadied his thoughts. His mind settled and rid itself of rage, reminding him that pride was best broken slowly, not fast. And he did want to break Potter, didn't he?

Not that it hadn't been... fascinating... to watch Potter come. To watch him crumble, defiance into stuttering, gasping desire--and it had been all Severus could do to keep speaking in a calm, distracted tone, seeing Potter shudder and arch and bite his lip, mouth hot and soft against the chill dungeon air. The child had obviously thought he was managing to hide it, what he was doing, what he was feeling as he tried to hold himself still--and that was so ridiculous it was almost charming, and Severus would have laughed if it wouldn't have spoiled the moment.

Where violence fails, Severus, try other means. One of his mother's first lessons, but Severus had never thought he'd apply it to a Potter. Strangely enough, this particular Potter seemed vulnerable to non-violent assault--ignorant enough to blame himself for it, failing even to understand that he'd been assaulted.

Severus almost hadn't gone through with it--but the whelp had tried his nerves enough today, and Severus had been determined to tame him. One way or another. He couldn't have allowed himself to go too far, but it didn't hurt to take advantage of Potter's little secret--the secret Severus had excavated from his mind, the secret Potter hid as desperately--and as helplessly--as an oyster hid its pearl. Fortunately, Potter had succumbed easily, as any boy his age would do--and Severus doubted Potter could imagine his surly professor doing this to him deliberately, out of any wish to discipline or admonish him.

Pleasure as punishment. Something Potter would no doubt learn later in life, as an adult, but then it would be too late--too late to turn back and change what had happened here, in this darkened corridor at night.

James Potter's son, indeed. Severus allowed himself a little smirk.

'Sir...?' Potter, delightfully tentative for once. They were at Severus' office, and the boy stood well away from the door, as if it were hexed.

Well. It was. All the better to greet Black with, of course.

'You may enter, Potter,' Severus said after placing his palm on the door, waiting for his wards to recognise him before the door swung open.

 

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The fire sprang to life as soon as they entered, and Severus went ahead to his desk before turning around, seeing Potter hover uncertainly near the threshold.

'The floor won't swallow you up, boy,' he snapped. 'Take the chair.'

Potter slunk forward like the thief he was--Severus didn't miss the little glance he shot towards the storeroom, as clear in its implications as a confession might have been. Severus never had forgotten about that mysterious disappearance of boomslang skin last year--but that particular larceny, if indeed it was Potter's doing, would have to be dealt with later. Severus had more immediate concerns--such as Potter's tendency to risk his own neck.

A brief punishment couldn't possibly work on Potter; he was much too persistent for that. Somehow, Severus had to keep him in one piece throughout the entire Christmas break... Preventative measures as well as curative ones, preferably.

Potter was growing uncomfortable in the silence, Severus could see--fidgeting in his chair and pulling his jumper down to cover his lap. Still rather damp, are we?

Severus casually picked up a quill and stroked it, slowly, watching Potter flush at the sight. 'Which potion was it?'

The boy blinked. 'Po--?'

'The potion, Potter. That you needed. Dreamless Sleep, I presume? Or was it something else?'

Potter stared at him again, and the relief that flashed through his eyes was sign enough that he'd lied. Let the fool think he'd been believed; it would put Potter at ease, and leave his face unguarded. 'Y-yes.' Potter swallowed. 'I--I keep having nightmares--'

'What about?'

'D-dementors.' There was a surprising amount of conviction in Potter's voice, and Severus wondered if perhaps Potter did have nightmares, at least occasionally. Well, it wouldn't hurt to ensure that Potter slept properly; if he did, perhaps he wouldn't be as likely to go traipsing around at night.

Not that he would take the potion, anyway; Severus knew enough of Potter's distrust. He didn't even need to dip into Potter's thoughts to hear the word poison revolving like a wind-chime in the brat's empty mind.

'Dementors,' Severus echoed, rather blandly. 'Nothing else?'

Potter, unaccountably, blushed--and Severus sensed, yet again, another flare of heat from him.

Ah. So Potter's other dreams certainly weren't nightmares, even though they kept him awake.

'Very well.' He drew his wand, and Potter tensed--but Severus only muttered an Accio, leaving his other hand open to catch a flying vial. It smacked into his palm, its clear liquid sparkling, and Severus leaned over the desk to offer it. 'Dreamless Sleep. Take no more than two drops after supper, and your nights should be restful.'

'Um.' Potter reached out gingerly, careful not to touch his fingers. 'Thanks.'

'You're welcome.' Severus had to hide another smirk at the sight of Potter's confusion; he wasn't used to Severus like this, relaxed and almost human. 'You do realise, of course, that although the potion might keep you in bed at night, it's no guarantee that you won't endanger yourself during the day.'

'Sir?'

'What I'm saying, Potter, is that you haven't exactly earned my trust with tonight's little... escapade--and I'm going to have to keep an eye on you for your own protection. To ensure that you don't try to find Black yourself.'

Potter's eyes narrowed with sickeningly obvious suspicion. 'Why wouldn't you want Black found, sir?'

Good gods, the impudence... Severus nearly lost his composure, but reminded himself of his plan. 'It's not that I don't want Black found, you imbecile. I simply don't want you to find him. Or him to find you.'

'... Oh.' Could disbelief and disappointment possibly coexist? Apparently, they could.

Severus' patience was stretching thin. He rapped at the table with his knuckles, and Potter jumped. 'Because I can't trust you to protect yourself, Potter, you'll spend every daylight hour of the Christmas holidays here. In the dungeons. With me.'

'What?' Potter gaped at him, all his previous diffidence gone. 'You can't be serious!'

'I can be serious, Potter, and I assure you that I am perfectly serious now.' Severus sat back and picked up his quill again, watching Potter's ire rise.

'But... but when will I see my friends?'

'During mealtimes. And after supper, when you retire to Gryffindor.'

Disbelief and rage, this time. 'You can't do this.'

'Can't I?' Severus raised an eyebrow, and as planned, Potter blushed again--probably remembering the last time he'd challenged Severus about what could and could not be done. 'Do you think the headmaster would react any differently, Potter? He might keep you in his office instead of mine, but in times of danger, he wouldn't leave you unguarded. Not with the castle mostly empty as it is, and you with your penchant for wandering in it.'

'But--' Potter cast about, sputtering. 'But these are my holidays!'

'Holidays you've decided to squander on reckless adventures, apparently. Don't think I can't imagine what other uses you've put that Cloak to.' He looked at where it lay, by Potter's feet, and performed another Accio.

'Hey!'

'Manners, Potter,' Severus said, almost absently. He draped the Cloak's sleek material--quite lovely, really--over his arm, and saw it disappear. The Dark Mark, truly invisible for the first time in years... Once again, the irony wasn't lost on Severus. 'I'll have to confiscate this.'

'No!' Potter's sentences were rapidly becoming riddled with exclamations. 'Give it back!'

Severus looked at him calmly. 'I won't.'

'You-- It belonged to--'

'Oh? To whom, exactly?'

But Potter only snapped his mouth shut, and it didn't take Severus long to deduce that the damned Cloak must have belonged to James. The knowledge almost made him shove the Cloak off his lap, except that it obviously hurt Potter to see Severus handle it. So Severus only smiled, and caressed it while Potter gritted his teeth. 'I'll surrender it into the headmaster's custody, Potter, and you'll no doubt be able to recover it once you leave school. We don't allow students to possess such items.'

Potter almost said something again, but apparently thought better of it--setting his lips into a hard line that was almost lovely in its petulance. He pushed his chair back, roughly, and stood up. There was murder in every line of his body, and Severus had no doubt that if hexing a teacher hadn't meant expulsion, Potter would have done it. 'I hate you,' Potter said quietly, his voice shaking.

No longer tame, then. Severus rose as well, letting the Cloak slip from his fingers onto his desk. 'Hatred matters very little, Potter.' He took care to keep his voice as quiet as Potter's, and as sincere. 'You'll discover that in time. It won't stop you from performing tasks you despise, for the people you despise.' Severus stepped around the table until he stood in front of Potter, who stared up at him defiantly. 'It's one of humanity's most futile emotions. And yet,' Severus touched Potter's sleeve, making Potter tense, 'it serves us well at night.' His hand found the cuff of that awful jumper, sliding beneath it. Potter was as still as a captured animal, breathing tightly. 'Cold nights, especially, when all we need is a little--' his fingers found the boy's warm pulse, digging in suddenly '--heat.'

Potter made a small sound, indecipherable but sweet nonetheless; his mouth wasn't so stubborn now, softened by the gasp Severus had wrenched from him. His heartbeat was erratic again, just as it had been in the corridor--and Severus was glad, for perhaps the first time in his professional life, that he only had to deal with children.

So easy to manipulate. So very easy, if one knew their weaknesses, to break.

'You'll return to your tower,' Severus said, voice cool as he stepped away again. 'And I'll escort you there. Tomorrow morning, you'll be here immediately after breakfast. A moment later, Potter, and you'll regret it.'

Potter was looking at Severus as if he were talking gibberish. His eyes were dark and dilated, and he had both of his hands behind him, white-knuckled, braced on his chair.

For some reason, the image struck a strange chord within Severus--the urge to stop and--look--to take note of it somehow, to remember it, as if it couldn't be replicated simply by pushing Potter's rather convenient buttons.

'Do you wish to spend your nights here as well, Potter?' Severus sneered finally, annoyed with himself, and with Potter for putting on such a--display. 'Because if you do, that can be arranged.'

That got Potter moving. Nothing like the threat of having one's desires granted, apparently.

The anger had started to return to Potter's face now, but it was anger mingled with confusion--confusion and an odd sort of despair, but Severus had no sympathy for the boy.

'After you,' he gestured mockingly, opening the door.

Potter brushed past him, not meeting his eyes--and Severus found himself resisting, quite suddenly, the urge to touch Potter's sleeve again.

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From:djin7
Date:July 12th, 2005 12:44 am (UTC)
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Oh, dear. Harry has done it to himself. Snape is only taking advantage of an opportunity as any good Slytherin might. But I have the feeling that our Severus has a slight weakness. That of the addiction of power. His supposed power over Harry in this case. In the end, it could ruin him if he is not careful, don't you think?

Another fantastic chapter, and I look forward, as always to yours and Atra's next.
Cheers!
From:switchknife
Date:July 12th, 2005 05:50 am (UTC)
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Harry has done it to himself.

*laughs evilly* Oh, yes, he has. In more ways than one--but Snape's 'done it' to him too, the exploitative bastard. :D

But I have the feeling that our Severus has a slight weakness. That of the addiction of power.

Quite right, my dear. It's that part of his personality that led him to become a Death Eater, I believe, and it's rather ironic that Gryffindor's Golden Boy should inspire the devil in him.

But he does also want to protect Harry, and quite sincerely, even if he won't admit it to himself--and it's the combination of these two contradictory urges that forms Snape's behaviour. I still chuckle to think that Snape honestly believes (well, as honestly as he can) that sexually abusing one of his own students is actually good for the student in question. As far as he's concerned, it's just the best method he's found to make Potter fall into line. (And hence into the safe boundaries of Snape's protection.)

Thanks so much for reviewing! You made me think about some of my own--I mean Snape's, er--motives.
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From:left_enthusiasm
Date:July 12th, 2005 12:52 am (UTC)
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All of this preying on (questionably) innocent ignorance is evilly wonderful. I love it!
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From:left_enthusiasm
Date:July 12th, 2005 12:56 am (UTC)
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And also, since I think that you and Atrata rock, she told me to tell you that I think so. You rock!
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From:ashenface
Date:July 12th, 2005 01:32 am (UTC)

yummy

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mmmm...
that last line is just pure brilliance!
it almost sounds if the dear professor is falling, but we both know he'll never ever admit to such a thing. mmmm..no marshmallows..just the way i like him.

snape my push potter buttons but your shure as hell pushing mine (not that i know if theres a difference between dear severus and yourself)
*melts quite deliciously on the floor*
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From:ashenface
Date:July 12th, 2005 01:33 am (UTC)

Re: yummy

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*may*
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From:oceanica
Date:July 12th, 2005 02:23 am (UTC)
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Hot DAMN. And I do mean HOT. ^_^!

I have to say, typically I avoid any pairing that has an adult/minor pairing, since that sort of thing tends to squick me out big time, but just has me like 0_0 drooling. Wow. TEH WOW.
From:switchknife
Date:July 12th, 2005 05:57 am (UTC)
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Hmm. We've corrupted you, have we?

*grins salaciously*

Welcome to the world of chan. I do hope you stay a while!

... has me like 0_0 drooling.

:D Thank you!
From:cravache
Date:July 12th, 2005 02:27 am (UTC)
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The running theme of heat and cold in both chapters stands out and works wonderfully. I said to atrata, the previous chapter was dark and atmoshpheric with the theme of heat and cold, black against black; Potter being overpowered by the blackness of Snape, and now we are seeing into the blackness of Snape in this chapter.

The Dark Mark, truly invisible for the first time in years... This is so interesting. You have, at the beginning of the chapter, Snape deducing Potter's vulnerability--Strangely enough, this particular Potter seemed vulnerable to non-violent assault--ignorant enough to blame himself for it, failing even to understand that he'd been assaulted--and then this. It is a glimpse into Severus' vulnerability--and he is truly more vulnerable that he allows himself to be seen, really. Behind every façade, there is vulnerability and the type of façade that is presented very oft gives away precisely what the person is trying to hide--and *gnashing teeth* it made me wish you had completed the sentence. Him seeing the Dark Mark truly invisible for the first time in years is a delicious, though small insight into Severus' psyche. His desire, his inner demons--gah, I am ranting, but it just really got me thinking about Severus' struggle within himself, of what he is versus what he desires.

And it is interesting also, because we are shown at the beginning of the chapter how much he delights in having such dark, heated control over Potter, and then in this one incomplete sentence, there is the thing that controls him, the Mark. Yes, he is not in the DE, however being that he was has left a deep imprint upon him, as permanent as the Mark itself and he'll forever carry around that reminder.

... *clears throat* Shit, I ramble. And over a half-sentence, too. Hee. Well, in summary, great chapter! What you are both collab'ing here is a true delight to read. I love reading your Snape; you have his intricate mind mapped out very, very well. *loves*
From:switchknife
Date:July 12th, 2005 06:18 am (UTC)

*loves back*

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SQUEE!

*coughs*

Um, yes. My god, I love your long reviews.

What amazed me in this review of yours was that you spotted something that I wasn't aware of (I can't speak for Atra)--that theme of heat and cold. I guess I picked it up from Atra naturally, because GAH, that last chapter--the sound of Potter's cool gasp was resounding like a gong in my head, and the heat of his skin put me into a veritable fever every time I tried to write this chapter. (Atra's EVIL EVIL EVIL to write with, you know--I mean, she's such a temptation, and her Harry just--makes me want to--do things--)

So I guess I followed through on that hot/cold/black theme without realising it, but NOW! Now you've pointed it out, and I'm like: 'SQUEE! Look how beautiful Atra and I are together!'

(Sorry, Atra. Tell me if I'm freaking you out. :D)

And. Er. Severus. Damned complicated man, as hard and sharp as a chisel, but vulnerable in all the right places, as you've said. (Okay. Some wrong places as well. Very wrong, if his reactions to his thirteen-year-old student are anything to go by.)

I'm delighted that you caught the Dark Mark line, little though it was--I wasn't sure anyone would really notice it, but it does mean a lot. How very much Severus longs to escape from his own darkness... to erase parts of his past, of himself. Not that Harry can see that, of course, with all the verbal bashing the poor boy's being subjected to. (Like I said somewhere before: snark = Snape's defense mechanism. And paranoia = his security system.)

It's very difficult, when writing Severus, to be sure that one isn't revealing too many of his vulnerabilities--I've found that it's better to leave most of them implied rather than explicitly stated, otherwise the verity of Snape's POV is violated.

I thought I mightn't have shown him at ALL, in the way I intended, but you've assured me that I have. :)

Thank you.
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From:lookfar
Date:July 12th, 2005 02:56 am (UTC)
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"would have laughed, would it not have spoiled the moment" is what you meant to type, I think.

*Man,* Switchknife, you are back, aren't you? This whole paragraph is hot:

Not that it hadn't been... fascinating... to watch Potter come. To watch him crumble, defiance into stuttering, gasping desire--and it had been all Severus could do to keep speaking in a calm, distracted tone, seeing Potter shudder and arch and bite his lip, mouth hot and soft against the chill dungeon air. The child had obviously thought he was managing to hide it, what he was doing, what he was feeling as he tried to hold himself still--and that was so ridiculous it was almost charming, and Severus would have laughed had it not spoiled the moment.

You used the alternating narrative structure to great advantage here. I really didn't know until I got to yours if Harry had been observed or not, or if the frottage was deliberate or -- well, not accidental, but unconscious.

The way you move into Snape's thoughts is natural and consistent, and your nasty Snape is believable and canon-correct.

And I'm really, really hoping that this will be a case of the seducer seduced. I think you're heading in that direction... sigh.
From:switchknife
Date:July 12th, 2005 05:39 am (UTC)
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Oh, thanks for pointing out that grammatical oversight! (This is what you get for having 15 different versions of one chapter... :D) I've corrected it now, to read: 'would have laughed if it wouldn't have spoiled the moment.'

I'm so glad you found that paragraph hot! The very thought of watching Harry come makes me Snape hot. Whether he'll admit it or not.

And yes, this narrative structure is one of the plus points of co-writing. With each person taking on a different character, we can provide mirror insights into the same event, from different perspectives. It's like a wonderful game of hide and seek, and Atra totally THREW me with her chapter. Hee--you can ask her just how ASDLKJALKJLJSKLF I was after that frottage scene. I think my Snape lost all his marbles for quite some time, and I had to wait before I could respond with anything coherent. ;)

... and canon-correct.

Except that canon!Snape doesn't diddle little boys, not to our knowledge. :D

... this will be a case of the seducer seduced.

It is rather impossible to resist Atra's Harry, isn't it?

Thank you! *hugs*
From:pir8fancier
Date:July 12th, 2005 04:41 am (UTC)
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Potter brushed past him, not meeting his eyes--and Severus found himself resisting, quite suddenly, the urge to touch Potter's sleeve again.

*Melts*

Just great, both chapters.
From:switchknife
Date:July 12th, 2005 06:19 am (UTC)
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You melted at the last line!

*hugs*

Thank you so much. :)
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From:annephoenix
Date:July 12th, 2005 06:37 am (UTC)
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All the little tiny touching. So drawn out and delicious ... Hints of heat, hints of danger - and pure arousal... I'm loving this fic!
From:switchknife
Date:July 12th, 2005 12:55 pm (UTC)
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Thank you! Snape seems to be surprisingly touchy-feely in this fic... but who can blame him when it's Harry he's touching?

*blinks at your icon*

*passes out*
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From:reddwarfer
Date:July 12th, 2005 09:08 am (UTC)
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Such divine impudence. How is Severus ever going to control himself?

Lela
From:switchknife
Date:July 12th, 2005 12:57 pm (UTC)
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I know! Atra Harry makes me Snape bare my his teeth and fight for control... of himself, of the boy--of the--situation--

Thankfully, Harry seems to subside at a relatively mild (!) degree of molestation. Not that Severus won't be happy to raise the stakes...
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From:lillian78
Date:July 12th, 2005 01:03 pm (UTC)
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Just had to say I love this series. The voices of both Harry and Snape are right on the money. Just lovely. *sigh*
From:switchknife
Date:July 12th, 2005 01:13 pm (UTC)
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Eee, thank you! :)
From:yanks02
Date:July 12th, 2005 01:15 pm (UTC)
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Yup, loved this chapter as well.

And I wish I could give you a long drawn out review, but alas, all I can think of are things like nghhh and guh.
From:switchknife
Date:July 12th, 2005 01:24 pm (UTC)
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LOL! 'Guh' is more than adequate--and rather flattering. :)

Thank you!
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From:ariadneelda
Date:July 12th, 2005 01:39 pm (UTC)
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He didn't even need to dip into Potter's thoughts to hear the word poison revolving like a wind-chime in the brat's empty mind.

I loved the wind-chime simile.

'Because I can't trust you to protect yourself, Potter, you'll spend every daylight hour of the Christmas holidays here. In the dungeons. With me.'

*rubs hands with glee*

'Cold nights, especially, when all we need is a little--' his fingers found the boy's warm pulse, digging in suddenly '--heat.'

Oh yes, Snape does break him slowly, juse like he planned to do. *melts*

Nothing like the threat of having one's desires granted, apparently.

Yes. Yes. YES.

Okay, it's official - I'm in love with your Snape. Everything about him is SO IC. And I have so many other favourite lines but this would be too long if I were to quote them all.
From:switchknife
Date:July 14th, 2005 12:15 am (UTC)
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Oh, you liked the wind-chime! :) And I'm sure that Snape would welcome the affections of another student! (He seems to welcome them rather more, actually, than is legal.)

Hee! Thank you.
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From:eriador117
Date:July 12th, 2005 02:21 pm (UTC)
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Oh, this is great, I was drawn it despite it being a WIP, arrgh! Now I can't wait to read more, I've read all six parts in the last hour and just want it to go on and on.

I'd never read any chan until I started reading in the HP universe, but this is just so good. Innocent Harry and manipulative Snape, can there be anything finer? LOL!

Take care,
Annette
From:switchknife
Date:July 14th, 2005 12:16 am (UTC)
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Mwahaha, we've drawn you into the land of WIPs and chanslash! Beware our evil schemes. ;)

Innocent Harry and manipulative Snape, can there be anything finer?

Nope, there certainly can't. :D

Thank you!
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From:viverra_libro
Date:July 14th, 2005 03:11 am (UTC)
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ooooo -- hard to think of anything hotter than punishments for a person's own good. I imagine Severus even thinks Potter will retain some actual benefit from having his willfullness thoroughly tamed. I wonder if he'd do the same without that veil of legitimacy?
From:switchknife
Date:July 14th, 2005 03:23 am (UTC)
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Hee! Yes, punishments for a person's good. I'm glad you found the concept hot!

I wonder if he'd do the same without that veil of legitimacy?

Ah, but being a Slytherin, he'd always make sure his actions had some sort of legitimacy. Either that, or he'd Obliviate the boy. :D
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From:yukipon
Date:July 14th, 2005 05:45 am (UTC)
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I finally got a time to read this series, and wow, I'm enjoying it so, so much!
Just seeing how badly little Harry plays his game...and he doesn't know it...thrills me.
What's great about this series is, when I read Harry's narration, I get to go into Harry's skin. I get to feel Snape's strong grasp on my arm, his cold and smooth voice pouring into my ears. When reading Snape's, I get to throw sarcastic words at him, feel the sick satisfaction on watching this poor boy squirm in my arms, helplessly.

atrata and switchknife, you guys are doing a marvelous job on this. Thank you so much and I look forward to the next chapter! ^_^
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From:atrata
Date:July 14th, 2005 06:26 am (UTC)
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Ah, thanks so much! I'm having an excellent time with the back-and-forth narrative structure -- you're right, it's very cool to know what's going on with both of them. I tend to stick very strictly to one POV in my own work, so this has been really great so far. Switch may be evil, but is very fun to write with. I'm glad you're enjoying the results. :)
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From:naughty__pixie
Date:July 14th, 2005 06:48 am (UTC)
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sorry i didn't mean to annoy you guys. i didn't realize you minded people watching/commenting. i shall bugger off now and refrain from commenting from now on. i deleted my other posts. i really am sorry. *hangs head in shame*
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From:atrata
Date:July 14th, 2005 07:08 am (UTC)
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Ack! No! Please, if we minded people watching, we'd take it elsewhere, yeah? There's absolutely no need to bugger off. How to explain... I do manage to forget sometimes, about being watched (which I blame on Switch robbing me of all capacity for rational thought), but it certainly doesn't annoy me to be reminded. I find it amusing, more than anything else, that I lose it so completely. Please don't be sorry. There's nothing at all to be sorry for, and in fact I'M sorry for making you think there might be.
From:mirrorwakes
Date:July 18th, 2005 01:35 am (UTC)
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OH MY FUCKING JESUS! Do I detect a hint of posession all ready!? - Potter brushed past him, not meeting his eyes--and Severus found himself resisting, quite suddenly, the urge to touch Potter's sleeve again.

Nothing like the threat of having one's desires granted, apparently. - I choaked on my chocolate bar when I read that line!

OH UPDATE SOON YOU TWO! Now H-BP is over (and Snape has become even MORE confusing), I NEED this!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Take pity!

Mirror

From:switchknife
Date:July 18th, 2005 01:30 pm (UTC)
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Haha! I mean, er. Thank you. ;) I'm just delighted to see that you're enjoying Severus' possessiveness, as I am.

We'll update ASAP! Friend this community and you'll see when!
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From:switchknife
Date:July 19th, 2005 04:29 am (UTC)
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:D Thank you. Harry's innocence is what makes him so delicious.
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From:sine_que_non767
Date:July 19th, 2005 01:56 pm (UTC)
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*sprawls, limp and helpless*

Ah, Switch. Oh. Oh.

God, you and Severus together are going to kill me. I can't tell you what this did to me.

In terms other than the orgasmic, beautiful writing (His eyes were dark and dilated, and he had both of his hands behind him, white-knuckled, braced on his chair), and characterisation (that was so ridiculous it was almost charming, and Severus would have laughed if it wouldn't have spoiled the moment), and more of those dark Snape-isms:

It won't stop you from performing tasks you despise, for the people you despise.

Hexing the door, and the manipulations over the Potion, and Harry, so sweetly played that I can't find it in myself to feel one ounce of pity. Your work, when it chooses, makes me over into the darkest side of Severus that you portray: feral, and merciless, and eager for the kill. It strips me of civilisation, really, for the time that I spend reading. Such strength you have in words!

Dear Switch, do write more. Soon.
From:switchknife
Date:July 19th, 2005 02:16 pm (UTC)
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SQUEE OMG!

Squee squee squee!!!11!1!1

*dances in an undignified fashion*

--Um. Darn, you remove all that pretense of dignity from me. My writing may or may not strip you of civilisation, but your reviews certainly do strip me of any sense of propriety!

*glomps you and does all sorts of indecent things*

Harry, so sweetly played that I can't find it in myself to feel one ounce of pity.

That's Atra's Harry. He just begs to be played with--she writes him so, defiant and yet utterly incapable of understanding his own vulnerability. How could Severus not take advantage of that? Gah. I have an unfortunate habit of entirely losing my head around her--and around her Harry. Severus becomes a wolf just barely reined in, and it's my mouth that floods with saliva, as if I were him.

*coughs*

... the darkest side of Severus that you portray: feral, and merciless, and eager for the kill.

Again, that's what Atra does to me. And it has a lot to do with my feelings in certain RL situations, feelings which, unfortunately, cannot find a safe outlet. That's probably where the sense of urgency comes from. Fiction's the best catharsis, yeah?

Atra's written the next part already, and I'm working on mine as we speak. It should be done in a day or two.
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From:sine_que_non767
Date:July 19th, 2005 03:01 pm (UTC)
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Tiny nitpick: 'A moment later, Potter, you'll regret it.'

I think you need an 'and' in there, to make 'and you'll regret it.' Otherwise, the regretting sound inevitable.
From:switchknife
Date:July 19th, 2005 03:06 pm (UTC)
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Ooh, thanks for pointing that out!

*fixes*

--But yeah, with Snape, the regretting kinda is inevitable. :P
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From:riari
Date:July 20th, 2005 04:21 am (UTC)
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I really, really, really like how this is going! The two different perspectives and not all of it overlaps either. Poor Harry, he'll never know what hit him. Poor innocent Harry. :>

I just really like this Snape.

Guh. I can't think of anything better to say than that I just love this. I need to friend this community.
From:switchknife
Date:July 20th, 2005 03:12 pm (UTC)
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Oh, thank you for friending the community, and for reviewing!

Poor innocent Harry.

Indeed.

*evil smile*
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From:wildestranger
Date:July 25th, 2005 03:33 pm (UTC)
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This is brilliant. It's time I stop hiding my tendency to read mindfucking Snape/Harry fic and start the gushing openly. The writing is gorgeous and the tension wonderfully created and maintained.
From:switchknife
Date:July 25th, 2005 03:37 pm (UTC)
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*blushes*

Thank you! The gushing is very much welcome--and makes me gush in return. :)
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From:mneomosyne
Date:May 15th, 2006 11:04 am (UTC)
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Your Snape has the best motives for his selective tutoring. I just love him this evil, enjoying himself with Harry far from the rightous path.